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The green light at the end of Daisy’s dock is more than a symbol of Gatsby’s longing. It shows how his desire depends on distance. As long as the light is across the water, it can stand for everything he wants. Once Daisy is in the room, the light becomes “an ordinary green light” again, and the dream has nothing left to hold on to (Fitzgerald 93).
This shift matters because it explains why Gatsby’s reunion with Daisy feels hollow. Fitzgerald is not only criticising wealth. He is showing how a fantasy shrinks when it meets a real person.
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